Thoughts Of The Day (19/1/10)

Today at school Miss Chia showed us two compositions done by my classsmates, Zong Rui and Chester. Miss Chia told us to vote one of the stories. I voted for Chester's story which was story 2. The reason i voted for his is,it has more actions and i can feel the scenes. I feel that Zong rui's story was too dramatic and the main character did not have much reations. Some of my classmates gave some comment on it. These are the comments.


Story 1

1)Vocab and good phrases(interest and vocab)

2) Not enough reactions form character

3) Don't like too much attention on the girl(Jeanie)

4)"Lumpy" big lump on main events

5) too dramatic

--- not realistic

---(subject)

--- exaggerated

Story 2

1) main character not outstanding bad character stand out

2) too gory(subject)

3)not enough emotion description

4)has more action

5) not realistic with law

---carry weapon (open to assumption)



Miss Chia also told us about her experience in her friends house. She recounted that she was at her friend house having dinner. Her friend called her son to have dinner at the dinner table. The kid did not want to go there and ask his father if he can eat dinner infront of the television. No matter how many times Miss Chia's friend shouted at her son to eat eat his dinner in the dinner table, the boy kept pestering his father and tried to negotiate with his parents.After dinner, the boy's father tried to persuade him and held his hand. The boy shouted at him. He ran to his room. Miss Chia was told to go and talk to the boy. The boy said that her mother was unreasonable and siad that he wanted sticker to feel good. The boy was very intelligent and was bright. I hope he will learn to be less stubborn and lead a great future.